When I first clicked on your project, I was confused and thought that a incorrect link had actually popped up on my page haha. It was not until I clicked on your comment wall and looked at your project that I truly realized it was a mistake. So I would love to commend you on how incredibly creative you are with your project! I can tell it is going to be interesting. Your introduction continues this extreme and obvious creativity. You have such a talent for this style of writing. I had fun reading your introduction and discovering what your project was going to be about. I am really excited to come back and view your project when you have done more to it! My only suggestion would to add more information to the cover page that this is for Indian Epics and not just for GEOG 4993, because I was truly confused for a while. Anyways, excellent job! This is going to be interesting and creative to follow.
Wow, Jeremy, this is such a crazy unique approach to this project. I'm excited to see behind the scenes rather than an alternate timeline. Honestly, I think this could be super helpful for my own deeper understanding of these stories. I can' wait to meet the kids that will be presenting this project. I hope they are as diverse as they kids I knew in high school. The professor's guidelines seem well structured and clear. I haven't taken an upper level geography class, but this seems plausible enough. If the professor is Hanuman, then will the kids in the class be other Ramayana characters? Or maybe Mahabharata characters? There are so many ways you could incorporate little references here and there, and I hope to see bunches of those nods to the original text! However, even without those, I feel like this will be a great success. Your writing seems solid, and you have a clearly fleshed out idea. Good luck!
I am very surprised at your project's subject matter. I guess it is best to play into your strong suits and I do hope geography is one of your strong suits. Nonetheless, once it is all done, I am sure your project is going to be a very informative read.
I do feel bad for you though, Reading the introduction it sounds to me like you have signed yourself up to not only create 4 fictional groups of students and a geography class but to do all 4 of their projects yourself! It's almost like you'll be doing a group project four times all by yourself. I wish you luck.
I did not see much wrong that needed changed though. My only suggestion might be that once you decide on the specific locations that you are going to study, maybe you could narrow down that huge selection from the front page and put only the parts you'll be using.
Hey Jeremy! First of all, this is definitely an interesting start to your storybook. How unique and creative! Content wise, you are going to have so much fun continuing your storybooks. You did a great job introducing the storybook, and the setting of the intro sets up such a great base for the rest of the stories. The beginning was so detailed and really felt just like high school days for some reason with those beloved group projects. Layout wise your storybook looks great as well. One minor suggestion is that it would be cool to make a chart or table with excel or microsoft word to portray your choices given to the class! That way instead of a big long list spaced out all of the information would be right there. Anyways, I'm excited to continue reading your stories and see where you take this and how you incorporate the geography. You definitely made a great choice, great job!
Just like all the previous comments on your wall, I also agree that is a very clever topic for your portfolio! Seeing what other students are interested in is a great way to see the Ramayana in a different light. I think that the content in you introduction is great so far, so I would only add a few more things to make it even better. Since this is such a clever topic, it needs more description of each place. It would be so cool to read about how influential these geographic locations affected the storyline of the Ramayana, so expanding on that would really make this an excellent introduction. Keep up the great work!
Wow, you chose such a great topic like everyone said. It is awesome that you thought of such an idea. It's nice to connect the history of Ramayana to present day India. I would suggest adding more about the geography in the intro so the people can get the just of where exactly Ramayana took place and how it relates to the reality. I wonder how you are going to work on all these projects? It seems like a lot of work. There are so many places in India that connects to Ramayana so how are you going to narrow down the list? I would suggest narrowing it down in introduction to give us general idea of what geographic region you will be focusing on. I also liked the pictures you used, which shows the trails of events that took place in the epic. Overall, I really like the concept of your story and look forward to reading about it. Good luck!
I will repeat what everyone else has said: you picked a very interesting topic for your project! I do not know about you, but doing an assignment like that for an actual geography or literature class sounds like a lot of fun. Listing out the possible locations for the class projects was a nice touch, too. It gives an idea for what one could expect from these fictional students' presentations. As for your first group project, what you have is very informational! Knowing where Ayodhya is, it makes the journey in the epic to Sri Lanka all the more, well, epic! My main critiques are the usual comma and spelling errors. This could be nit picky, but even though you have a lot of stuff in you first meta-project, it feels like there is a lot of white space. Of course, others may not have a problem with this. Overall, I love what you have done so far! It gives great background to what we have read and heard to this point! Keep up the good work!
I read your group 1 of the story and I enjoyed the details about all the places mentioned in Ramayana. Especially Ayodha, I know there is still controversies going on between the temple that was built for Rama and the mosque build by Muslims. It was neat that you added those details for us to know. I think one thing that you could work on is the spacing, it is irregular throughout the story. It is very easy to fix off course. Another thing is to just double check on grammar. There aren't any noticeable mistakes so you can easily fix them. I liked that you added so many pictures, especially for every topic that you decided to cover. It was nice to visualize where all the cities, river, and mountains are located in current day India. It was nice that you added on what happened after Rama was gone, as the Mughal Empires started taking over. Also adding Hinduism and Buddhism spreading over Asia was a good topic that you covered. Good job, It looks great and can't wait to read more about the group presentations from you. Also, if you are running out of ideas then you can talk about Lanka, which is present day Sri Lanka.
Jeremy, your introduction to your storybook really sets us up for what to expect and it is also an interesting and neat idea to utilize the geography of the Ramayana. I have never seen this done before, so this is awesome to see something new! It really grabbed my attention with the title and even the subtitle at the top-left corner. It didn't make much sense until I read your intro, which made me giggle when I finally understood it. After reading your "Group 1" story, you have really done your research and incorporated the geography so believably well! Although, I was slightly confused by Rama as a character presenting his own story? Or is the presenter someone else, just explaining the story of Rama? I understand, somewhat, after reading your author's note, but I'm still slightly confused. Other than that, I do love the creativity in how you had each character tell of the regions and other aspects of the story.
I really love your storybook just because it is SO creative and SO different! The idea to turn the storybook into a geography course, that was brilliant. It seems like you put a lot of research into this because you have listed out all the mountains, cities, bodies of water, kingdoms, and forests that the students could use! You also went into a lot of depth when explaining Group 1's project, so great job on that! I do have one suggestion: when Rama is presenting, he is kind of presenting about himself (or someone with the same name as him); maybe you could change his name to another character, or just a random name you like? But it's not a huge deal! Just something I noticed while reading. Overall, I love where your storybook is headed! Awesome job on the creativeness of your stories and I can't wait to read the rest of it :)
This project is off to an awesome start. I think your idea is really cool and I was really interested to see what you were going to write about when I first clicked on your link. This project is totally different from everybody else's, which is great because it can get a little repetitive reading the same thing over and over again. I really had no context of the geography of Indian Epics until I came across your project. You use great illustrations and I really like the layout of everything. The introduction was really great, and you did not disappoint for the group 1. There are so many pictures and description that it really makes it easy for the reader to see what you're talking about. You went above and beyond on your project, and you should be proud of it. I think this will help other students in the class when they are writing stories because now that have a better sense of where everything is located. Great start to your project and I will definitely be coming back to your webpage to check out the other groups. Great work. Brooks
Hi Jeremy! This was a really creative approach to the project, it definitely took some thought and I applaud you for that. I’m not too well informed on the Epic of Ramayana, but I feel like I can learn a lot from your storybook. It’s an interesting a concept, and I’m kind of curious to learn your inspiration. The way these stories are delivered provides a very informational and educational reading experience, which I’m sure that is what you were kind of aiming for. It still manages to tell a story which is really great. I also like that you included the other significances that surround the city. It interesting to have you characters have names from the epic. Reading your stories reminded me of my presentations in high school, they never went as well as the ones you’ve written. I liked that your storybook reminded me that some of these epics took place in real locations and because of that, these places are seen as holy sites or have other significance. Great work so far!
Hey Jeremy. So first of all I really like the idea of your storybook and how it is based off of a high school project. It is a very interesting idea and I would never have been able to think of it so it is really cool that you were able to think of it. I know you are going to be a teacher and I think you will be a good one with the creative and fun assignments you can come up with. I like how you found these geographical locations and told the stories behind them. Also I like how the students name are connected to the stories related to the places. As an architecture major I also like how you talked about Angkor Wat because in my History of the Built Environment class I just learned about how all Hindu temples were built to look represent mountains and caves because of the religious representations of the two. All in all, I really like your stories and I hope to read more soon.
I really enjoyed reading through your project. I think yours is by far the most non-traditional project that I have seen and I really enjoyed looking at something different. Your introduction lays out what to expect from your project really nicely and provides some narrative since the rest of your project is mostly explanation. I wish I had found this project earlier since I definetely did not have a clear mental image of the geography of the Ramayana while reading it. I will say I think you could maybe add a couple lines of narrative at the beginning an end of your stories to still make them feel like stories. Maybe have one of the student's ask a question and then have one of the students answer or the teacher comment. Overall, I really enjoyed it and thought you did a great job. I look forward to reading anything else you add to the storybook!
Hey again Jeremy! It's been a while since I was first on your page and you have been a busy bee! Each story is massive in scale. Not only have you been telling a unique story about the various locations, but you also have been putting it in context within a grander narrative of the country. I think this is by far one of the blogs greatest strengths. The way you incorporate all this information into a presentation works quite well. As I suspected it seems like a great deal of work considering all the research that must go into these projects. My one complaint about these is that they always seem to bias towards one specific location, I doubt there is anything you really can do since the goal is to have one of the locations have a bigger story, but it creates an uneven spread of information that encourages people to skim once they finish the main story. Possibly you could save it for the end after you've described all the locations. Anyway, I'm excited to keep reading and being educated as I go!
I have visited your site before about a month ago and I read the introduction and group 1 part of the project. I am glad the Randomizer brought me back to your project again. You did such an amazing job for the geography of Group 2 and Group 3. I loved that you gave present day description of all the geographical features of Ramayana and Mahabharata. I can only imagine searching through sites to looks for information from past and present. Great job on such a great project. I would say maybe you could add more dialogues of students asking questions here and there. That would help us to remember that a group is saying all this. Overall, I loved your project the best from this class because of the amount of time you spent on all this and I love learning about geography. Good luck with rest of the project.
I am glad I got to read your site for the first time. I thought I had already read most peoples stories but I stubbled upon yours and was pleasantly surprised I hadn't yet visited. I think your project was very interesting and was nice to see something different than most of the other projects in the class. You had to do a lot of research to get all of this information and it really payed off cause of how good your writing was. I was interested to read about the Ramayana as I have done my project over this because I loved the story to it. I can tell you really enjoyed studying the different groups and it has payed off greatly in your project as it turned out really well. Great job! Finish off the semester well
Hey, Jeremy! The approach you've taken to this project is so unique! It is a very cool way to go about making this project shine. It stands out from the rest of the projects because of the unique format and content. I really like the unique approach to the project by highlighting different geographical regions. As much as I like this concept I almost wished there was more story involved. I do like that you present different areas from the perspective of your characters. I think if you were to add some information about how all of these areas relate to the story of Ramayana it would make your project that much stronger. The only other thing I think you could take a look at is the organization of each groups presentation. Some parts just feel like an information dump and can be a little tricky to get through, especially if you are reading fast, it bogs down the flow of the project. Other than that, well done!
Hi Jeremy! I think this might be one of the most unique storybooks that I've seen. It's so creative, and it manages to be incredibly informative at the same time. You were able to incorporate practical information, but there was still a nice storytale quality to it. I particularly enjoyed the various fictional places that you incorporated, and learning their possible real-life counterpart, or at least a guess about where they might have been located. Your site is nice and really well organized, particularly in light of how much you incorporated into your stories, and your pictures and the videos were fantastic. It was obvious that you put a great deal of research into this project, and I think it came out spectacularly. Great job!
Jeremy,
ReplyDeleteWhen I first clicked on your project, I was confused and thought that a incorrect link had actually popped up on my page haha. It was not until I clicked on your comment wall and looked at your project that I truly realized it was a mistake. So I would love to commend you on how incredibly creative you are with your project! I can tell it is going to be interesting. Your introduction continues this extreme and obvious creativity. You have such a talent for this style of writing. I had fun reading your introduction and discovering what your project was going to be about. I am really excited to come back and view your project when you have done more to it! My only suggestion would to add more information to the cover page that this is for Indian Epics and not just for GEOG 4993, because I was truly confused for a while. Anyways, excellent job! This is going to be interesting and creative to follow.
Wow, Jeremy, this is such a crazy unique approach to this project. I'm excited to see behind the scenes rather than an alternate timeline. Honestly, I think this could be super helpful for my own deeper understanding of these stories. I can' wait to meet the kids that will be presenting this project. I hope they are as diverse as they kids I knew in high school. The professor's guidelines seem well structured and clear. I haven't taken an upper level geography class, but this seems plausible enough. If the professor is Hanuman, then will the kids in the class be other Ramayana characters? Or maybe Mahabharata characters? There are so many ways you could incorporate little references here and there, and I hope to see bunches of those nods to the original text! However, even without those, I feel like this will be a great success. Your writing seems solid, and you have a clearly fleshed out idea. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteHey Jeremy.
ReplyDeleteI am very surprised at your project's subject matter. I guess it is best to play into your strong suits and I do hope geography is one of your strong suits. Nonetheless, once it is all done, I am sure your project is going to be a very informative read.
I do feel bad for you though, Reading the introduction it sounds to me like you have signed yourself up to not only create 4 fictional groups of students and a geography class but to do all 4 of their projects yourself! It's almost like you'll be doing a group project four times all by yourself. I wish you luck.
I did not see much wrong that needed changed though. My only suggestion might be that once you decide on the specific locations that you are going to study, maybe you could narrow down that huge selection from the front page and put only the parts you'll be using.
Hey Jeremy!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, this is definitely an interesting start to your storybook. How unique and creative! Content wise, you are going to have so much fun continuing your storybooks. You did a great job introducing the storybook, and the setting of the intro sets up such a great base for the rest of the stories. The beginning was so detailed and really felt just like high school days for some reason with those beloved group projects. Layout wise your storybook looks great as well. One minor suggestion is that it would be cool to make a chart or table with excel or microsoft word to portray your choices given to the class! That way instead of a big long list spaced out all of the information would be right there.
Anyways, I'm excited to continue reading your stories and see where you take this and how you incorporate the geography. You definitely made a great choice, great job!
Jeremy,
ReplyDeleteJust like all the previous comments on your wall, I also agree that is a very clever topic for your portfolio! Seeing what other students are interested in is a great way to see the Ramayana in a different light. I think that the content in you introduction is great so far, so I would only add a few more things to make it even better. Since this is such a clever topic, it needs more description of each place. It would be so cool to read about how influential these geographic locations affected the storyline of the Ramayana, so expanding on that would really make this an excellent introduction. Keep up the great work!
Hi Jeremy,
ReplyDeleteWow, you chose such a great topic like everyone said. It is awesome that you thought of such an idea. It's nice to connect the history of Ramayana to present day India. I would suggest adding more about the geography in the intro so the people can get the just of where exactly Ramayana took place and how it relates to the reality. I wonder how you are going to work on all these projects? It seems like a lot of work. There are so many places in India that connects to Ramayana so how are you going to narrow down the list? I would suggest narrowing it down in introduction to give us general idea of what geographic region you will be focusing on. I also liked the pictures you used, which shows the trails of events that took place in the epic. Overall, I really like the concept of your story and look forward to reading about it. Good luck!
Hi, Jeremy!
ReplyDeleteI will repeat what everyone else has said: you picked a very interesting topic for your project! I do not know about you, but doing an assignment like that for an actual geography or literature class sounds like a lot of fun. Listing out the possible locations for the class projects was a nice touch, too. It gives an idea for what one could expect from these fictional students' presentations.
As for your first group project, what you have is very informational! Knowing where Ayodhya is, it makes the journey in the epic to Sri Lanka all the more, well, epic! My main critiques are the usual comma and spelling errors. This could be nit picky, but even though you have a lot of stuff in you first meta-project, it feels like there is a lot of white space. Of course, others may not have a problem with this.
Overall, I love what you have done so far! It gives great background to what we have read and heard to this point! Keep up the good work!
Hi Jeremy,
ReplyDeleteI read your group 1 of the story and I enjoyed the details about all the places mentioned in Ramayana. Especially Ayodha, I know there is still controversies going on between the temple that was built for Rama and the mosque build by Muslims. It was neat that you added those details for us to know. I think one thing that you could work on is the spacing, it is irregular throughout the story. It is very easy to fix off course. Another thing is to just double check on grammar. There aren't any noticeable mistakes so you can easily fix them. I liked that you added so many pictures, especially for every topic that you decided to cover. It was nice to visualize where all the cities, river, and mountains are located in current day India. It was nice that you added on what happened after Rama was gone, as the Mughal Empires started taking over. Also adding Hinduism and Buddhism spreading over Asia was a good topic that you covered. Good job, It looks great and can't wait to read more about the group presentations from you. Also, if you are running out of ideas then you can talk about Lanka, which is present day Sri Lanka.
Jeremy, your introduction to your storybook really sets us up for what to expect and it is also an interesting and neat idea to utilize the geography of the Ramayana. I have never seen this done before, so this is awesome to see something new! It really grabbed my attention with the title and even the subtitle at the top-left corner. It didn't make much sense until I read your intro, which made me giggle when I finally understood it. After reading your "Group 1" story, you have really done your research and incorporated the geography so believably well! Although, I was slightly confused by Rama as a character presenting his own story? Or is the presenter someone else, just explaining the story of Rama? I understand, somewhat, after reading your author's note, but I'm still slightly confused. Other than that, I do love the creativity in how you had each character tell of the regions and other aspects of the story.
ReplyDeleteHey Jeremy!
ReplyDeleteI really love your storybook just because it is SO creative and SO different! The idea to turn the storybook into a geography course, that was brilliant. It seems like you put a lot of research into this because you have listed out all the mountains, cities, bodies of water, kingdoms, and forests that the students could use! You also went into a lot of depth when explaining Group 1's project, so great job on that! I do have one suggestion: when Rama is presenting, he is kind of presenting about himself (or someone with the same name as him); maybe you could change his name to another character, or just a random name you like? But it's not a huge deal! Just something I noticed while reading. Overall, I love where your storybook is headed! Awesome job on the creativeness of your stories and I can't wait to read the rest of it :)
Hi Jeremy,
ReplyDeleteThis project is off to an awesome start. I think your idea is really cool and I was really interested to see what you were going to write about when I first clicked on your link. This project is totally different from everybody else's, which is great because it can get a little repetitive reading the same thing over and over again. I really had no context of the geography of Indian Epics until I came across your project. You use great illustrations and I really like the layout of everything. The introduction was really great, and you did not disappoint for the group 1. There are so many pictures and description that it really makes it easy for the reader to see what you're talking about. You went above and beyond on your project, and you should be proud of it. I think this will help other students in the class when they are writing stories because now that have a better sense of where everything is located. Great start to your project and I will definitely be coming back to your webpage to check out the other groups. Great work.
Brooks
Hi Jeremy!
ReplyDeleteThis was a really creative approach to the project, it definitely took some thought and I applaud you for that. I’m not too well informed on the Epic of Ramayana, but I feel like I can learn a lot from your storybook. It’s an interesting a concept, and I’m kind of curious to learn your inspiration. The way these stories are delivered provides a very informational and educational reading experience, which I’m sure that is what you were kind of aiming for. It still manages to tell a story which is really great. I also like that you included the other significances that surround the city. It interesting to have you characters have names from the epic.
Reading your stories reminded me of my presentations in high school, they never went as well as the ones you’ve written. I liked that your storybook reminded me that some of these epics took place in real locations and because of that, these places are seen as holy sites or have other significance. Great work so far!
Hey Jeremy.
ReplyDeleteSo first of all I really like the idea of your storybook and how it is based off of a high school project. It is a very interesting idea and I would never have been able to think of it so it is really cool that you were able to think of it. I know you are going to be a teacher and I think you will be a good one with the creative and fun assignments you can come up with. I like how you found these geographical locations and told the stories behind them. Also I like how the students name are connected to the stories related to the places. As an architecture major I also like how you talked about Angkor Wat because in my History of the Built Environment class I just learned about how all Hindu temples were built to look represent mountains and caves because of the religious representations of the two. All in all, I really like your stories and I hope to read more soon.
Hi Jeremy!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading through your project. I think yours is by far the most non-traditional project that I have seen and I really enjoyed looking at something different. Your introduction lays out what to expect from your project really nicely and provides some narrative since the rest of your project is mostly explanation. I wish I had found this project earlier since I definetely did not have a clear mental image of the geography of the Ramayana while reading it. I will say I think you could maybe add a couple lines of narrative at the beginning an end of your stories to still make them feel like stories. Maybe have one of the student's ask a question and then have one of the students answer or the teacher comment. Overall, I really enjoyed it and thought you did a great job. I look forward to reading anything else you add to the storybook!
Hey again Jeremy!
ReplyDeleteIt's been a while since I was first on your page and you have been a busy bee! Each story is massive in scale. Not only have you been telling a unique story about the various locations, but you also have been putting it in context within a grander narrative of the country.
I think this is by far one of the blogs greatest strengths. The way you incorporate all this information into a presentation works quite well. As I suspected it seems like a great deal of work considering all the research that must go into these projects.
My one complaint about these is that they always seem to bias towards one specific location, I doubt there is anything you really can do since the goal is to have one of the locations have a bigger story, but it creates an uneven spread of information that encourages people to skim once they finish the main story. Possibly you could save it for the end after you've described all the locations.
Anyway, I'm excited to keep reading and being educated as I go!
Hey Jeremy,
ReplyDeleteI have visited your site before about a month ago and I read the introduction and group 1 part of the project. I am glad the Randomizer brought me back to your project again. You did such an amazing job for the geography of Group 2 and Group 3. I loved that you gave present day description of all the geographical features of Ramayana and Mahabharata. I can only imagine searching through sites to looks for information from past and present. Great job on such a great project. I would say maybe you could add more dialogues of students asking questions here and there. That would help us to remember that a group is saying all this. Overall, I loved your project the best from this class because of the amount of time you spent on all this and I love learning about geography. Good luck with rest of the project.
Jeremy,
ReplyDeleteI am glad I got to read your site for the first time. I thought I had already read most peoples stories but I stubbled upon yours and was pleasantly surprised I hadn't yet visited. I think your project was very interesting and was nice to see something different than most of the other projects in the class. You had to do a lot of research to get all of this information and it really payed off cause of how good your writing was. I was interested to read about the Ramayana as I have done my project over this because I loved the story to it. I can tell you really enjoyed studying the different groups and it has payed off greatly in your project as it turned out really well. Great job! Finish off the semester well
Hey, Jeremy! The approach you've taken to this project is so unique! It is a very cool way to go about making this project shine. It stands out from the rest of the projects because of the unique format and content. I really like the unique approach to the project by highlighting different geographical regions. As much as I like this concept I almost wished there was more story involved. I do like that you present different areas from the perspective of your characters. I think if you were to add some information about how all of these areas relate to the story of Ramayana it would make your project that much stronger. The only other thing I think you could take a look at is the organization of each groups presentation. Some parts just feel like an information dump and can be a little tricky to get through, especially if you are reading fast, it bogs down the flow of the project. Other than that, well done!
ReplyDeleteHi Jeremy!
ReplyDeleteI think this might be one of the most unique storybooks that I've seen. It's so creative, and it manages to be incredibly informative at the same time. You were able to incorporate practical information, but there was still a nice storytale quality to it. I particularly enjoyed the various fictional places that you incorporated, and learning their possible real-life counterpart, or at least a guess about where they might have been located. Your site is nice and really well organized, particularly in light of how much you incorporated into your stories, and your pictures and the videos were fantastic. It was obvious that you put a great deal of research into this project, and I think it came out spectacularly. Great job!